Making changes as per editing

Nkrb · Nkrb · commit 1944c49a1b88 · 2020-11-03T10:10:46.000-08:00
diff --git a/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/app-for-health-and-safety-lead.md b/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/app-for-health-and-safety-lead.md
@@ -68,10 +68,6 @@ The Workplace Care Management app has the following components:
 
 - **Case Managers**: List of all users who have access to the **Employee Cases** area.
 
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 ## Manage employee and case managers master data
 
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+This section explains hoe you can manage employees and case managers data.
 
 ### Manage employees
 
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   > ![Monitoring](media/health-safety-bpf-monitoring.png "Monitoring")
 
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 A case manager can inform an employee that the facility is not available to enter for a while. When **Facility Access Available** is set to **No**, the employee won't be able to get a day pass. When you inform an employee that facility access is not available, you'll be able to give **Employee Instructions** that are visible in the app. With the **Facility Access Available Date**, you can inform the employee of when they will be able to get a day pass again. A flow will automatically reset **Facility Access Available** when the date is reached.
 
 #### Resolve
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 #### Exposure score
 
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 Exposure score is calculated when the system generates case contacts as suggestions when a case manager links an employee attestation record. The system creates one record per person. If a person shares area, entry time window, or floor through multiple attestations, the exposure score on the existing record is increased. 
 
 For each day, case contacts get points only for the highest category applicable. For example, if a case contact suggestion shared area on one day (10 points) and shared entry time window on another day (5 points), the total exposure score for that case contact would be 15.
diff --git a/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/configure.md b/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/configure.md
@@ -229,11 +229,6 @@ The facility sample data file is available in the package. When you want to impo
 
 **To import sample facility data to the Facility entity**
 
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 1. On the left pane, under **Facility Management**, select **Facilities**.
 
 2. Select **Import from Excel**, and select the facilities data file.
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 ## Contoso sample data
 
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 When installing the Return to the Workplace solution, Contoso sample data is installed with it so you can try out the solution. The sample data includes data around the following entities. We advise you to import or create your own data for these entities.
 
 - Facilities
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 - Solution Settings
 
 
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-Usage sample data is generated by four flows. These need to be disabled when you are not using the Contoso sample data or when accessing the solution in a production environment.
+Usage sample data is generated by five flows. These need to be disabled when you are not using the Contoso sample data or when accessing the solution in a production environment.
 
 - Sample Data - Generate Facility transitions
 
diff --git a/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/dashboard-case-management.md b/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/dashboard-case-management.md
@@ -18,10 +18,6 @@ This article is for health and safety leads who use the Power BI dashboard to ga
 
 1. Open Power BI Desktop.
 
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 2. In the search bar, search for Return to Workplace – **Care management**.
 
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 - Cases per case manager: Average number of cases under investigation per case manager.
 
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-The interactive map displays the ___location of cases in the investigating stage. You can drill into the data by country, province, and facility. The size of the bubble represents the number of cases. 
+The interactive map displays the ___location of cases in the investigating stage. You can drill into the data by country, state, and facility. The size of the bubble represents the number of cases. 
 
 The case manager overview table contains information about case manager, number of cases, time to start investigating, and time to reach a contact.
 
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 - Resolved cases: Total number of cases already resolved.
 
 
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 - Avg resolution time (days): Average time taken for a case from being opened to resolved.
 
-The interactive map displays the ___location of cases in the monitoring phase. You can drill into the data by country, province, and facility. The size of the bubble represents the number of cases. The case manager overview table contains information about case manager, number of cases, average resolution time, and variance from average.
+The interactive map displays the ___location of cases in the monitoring phase. You can drill into the data by country, state, and facility. The size of the bubble represents the number of cases. The case manager overview table contains information about case manager, number of cases, average resolution time, and variance from average.
 
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 > ![System at a glance - COVID cases](media/pbi-dash-report-fatalcovidcases2.png "System at a glance - COVID cases")
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 Map displays active cases by facility. To view a cluster, select a facility on the map. 
 
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diff --git a/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/deploy.md b/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/deploy.md
@@ -39,10 +39,6 @@ After you've purchased Power Apps, create an environment with a Common Data Serv
 
 3. Create appropriate users, and assign security roles. More information: [Create users and assign security roles](https://docs.microsoft.com/power-platform/admin/create-users-assign-online-security-roles)
 
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 After you've created your environment and it is ready, you can access it by using the following URL: `https://[myenv].[region].dynamics.com`, where [myenv] is the name of your environment and [region] is the deployment region—for example, crm for US. Make a note of this environment URL.
 
 ## Step 2: Install the package
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 ### Install template app for dashboards
 
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-1. Go to AppSource to install the [Return to the Workplace – Location Readiness](https://aka.ms/rtw-leadershippbi), [Return to the Workplace - Location Management](https://aka.ms/rtw-facilitypbi), and [Return to the Workplace - Workplace Care Management](https://aka.ms/rtw-workplacepbi) dashboards. 
+1. Go to AppSource to install the [Return to the Workplace – Location Readiness](https://aka.ms/rtw-leadershippbi), [Return to the Workplace - Facility Management](https://aka.ms/rtw-facilitypbi), and [Return to the Workplace - Workplace Care Management](https://aka.ms/rtw-workplacepbi) dashboards. 
 
 2. Select **GET IT NOW** to install the solution in your environment.
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 1. Go to [Power Apps](https://make.powerapps.com), select **Solutions** in the left pane, and create a new solution. After opening the solution, select **Add existing**, and then select **Entity**.
 
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-2. From the list of entities, select **Facility (msft_facility)** > **select components**, under the **Forms** tab, select **Main - Information Form**, and then select **Add** to finish the process. 
+2. From the list of entities, select **Facility (msft_facility)** , under the **Forms** tab, select **Main - Information Form**, and then select **Add** to finish the process. 
 
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    > ![Enable Power BI](media/deploy-settings-report1.png "Enable Power BI")
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 2. In the **Properties** dialog box, select the **Unblock** check box, select **Apply**, and then select **OK**.
 
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      > ![Save the Power BI workspace](media/deploy-gcc-publish.png "Save the Power BI workspace")
 
+9. You'll be prompted to save the file along with your Common Data Service environment information. Enter a name, and save it on your computer. The file name you enter is displayed in your Power BI website.
 
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-9. You'll be prompted to save the file as a .pbix file along with your Common Data Service environment information. Enter a name, and save it on your computer. The file name you enter is displayed in your Power BI website.
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-10. After saving the .pbix file, you'll be prompted to publish the report. In the **Publish to Power BI** page, select the workspace where you want to publish, and then select **Select**.
+10. After saving the file, you'll be prompted to publish the report. In the **Publish to Power BI** page, select the workspace where you want to publish, and then select **Select**.
 
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     > ![Publish to Power BI](media/deploy-gcc-select-destination.png "Publish to Power BI")
 
     The report becomes available in your workspace.
 
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 11. For the facility manager dashboard, the URL will be in the following format:
     https://app.powerbi.com/groups/3d6db5d0-22c7-4674-b957-0605c021511d/reports/bf9cd5a1-c176-4786-9c4e-684a79678575/ReportSection?redirectedFromSignup=1<br/>
     Copy the Power BI report URL to a text file, because you'll need to embed it in the model-driven app.
diff --git a/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/upgrade.md b/powerapps-docs/sample-apps/return-to-workplace/upgrade.md
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 ### Step 4: Make employee cases inactive
 
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-In the new version of the solution, employee cases become inactive when they're completed. For any employee cases that are completed, you can move them to the inactive state by completing them. More information: [Use the Workplace Care Management app](app-for-health-and-safety-lead.md#manage-employee-cases)
+In the new version of the solution, employee cases become inactive when they're completed. More information: [Use the Workplace Care Management app](app-for-health-and-safety-lead.md#manage-employee-cases)
 
 
 ## Upgrade from version 1.1 to 1.2
